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Karma: 14 |  | Re: The Speed Hunter - by Bugz Toon
« Reply #30 on Aug 23, 2008, 1:23pm » | ![[Quote]](http://s4.images.proboards.com/buttons/quote.gif) |
Aug 22, 2008, 2:38pm, bugztoon wrote:Oh... one other thing I forgot to mention when responding to your reviews... you expressed surprise that the Colonel didn't have someone with Gyo watching the cells to prevent the escape; the government teams don't have a Nen user. I honestly was trying to get away from the "Nen users are flipping everywhere" feel of the last couple of arcs (the Ant Arc because, well, everybody else is dead, and Greed Island because of... well, duh  ). Nen users are supposed to be rare as all get-out- even well-connected, highly intelligent people can get through life without the slightest clue they exist. The only 'official' ways to learn Nen appear to be through Hunter connections (in fact, it's commented that that's a major reason why the organization even exists, to keep Nen out of the hands of the 'unworthy'); and, if the bits we've seen are any indication, an average of four-five people pass every year. That would make even Nen-less Hunters one in a million, and those who learn Nen are even rarer than that.
To put that in some kind of perspective, that would be a grand total of roughly six thousand people on the entire planet who know Nen. Allowing for unlicensed users like that dog-guy from Kurapika's Mafia group and the idiots at the Battle Tower, we could bump it up to... maybe twenty thousand, at a very, very generous guesstimate. The story has been running into a disproportionate number of them simply because of the last few arcs (and, of course, the Shonen need to have everything Harder, Better, Faster, Stronger every time something changes >.>).
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Says the Colonel to Ryozha: you're a national security risk, capable of bankrupting a nation, so we've put together a whole army to stop you and we're locking you up in a high-tech facility which is booby-trapped to the teeth and which is guaranteed to kill you if you try to escape. This operation has probably cost us millions - but just because we're in charge of national security willing to engage in flagrant breaches of human rights and due process doesn't mean we won't try to cut corners where we can - like, you know, not hire nen-users to deal with nen-users, especially ones who move so fast we can hardly track them.
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« Reply #31 on Aug 23, 2008, 6:10pm » | |
Quote:| Says the Colonel to Ryozha: you're a national security risk, capable of bankrupting a nation, so we've put together a whole army to stop you and we're locking you up in a high-tech facility which is booby-trapped to the teeth and which is guaranteed to kill you if you try to escape. This operation has probably cost us millions - but just because we're in charge of national security willing to engage in flagrant breaches of human rights and due process doesn't mean we won't try to cut corners where we can - like, you know, not hire nen-users to deal with nen-users, especially ones who move so fast we can hardly track them. |
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Quote:| Nen users are supposed to be rare as all get-out- even well-connected, highly intelligent people can get through life without the slightest clue they exist. |
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The colonel acknowledges that Ryozha and crew have some unusual abilities, but he has no idea about Nen, nor does he really know that they have what amounts to super-powers. It's not 'cutting corners' it's 'not knowing about something that's supposed to be so secret that even the borderline omniscient Kurapika didn't have a clue about it until told'.
Hrm. Maybe I should include a line to the effect of they're not sure how he's getting away from them all the time; they're not supposed to know about Nen (and Ryozha's made at least a token attempt to make sure they don't learn about it from him). As far as I remember, even the Interpol we-have-more-data-than-God types during the YorkShin arc (the ones that were brought on panel to basically exposit about Ryuusegai) didn't give any kind of indication that they knew about Nen when they were explaining why they'd decided to leave the Genei Ryodan alone.
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Karma: 14 | | Re: The Speed Hunter - by Bugz Toon
« Reply #32 on Aug 23, 2008, 6:56pm » | |
Aug 22, 2008, 3:06am, bugztoon wrote:| As an aside, having read Bona Fide and A Wayward Journey, I now understand a little better your annoyance at my inclusion of Illumi as a 'mere' obstacle in my story- I was playing with one of your toys, and not giving him a proper showing. |
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Hey, you know what, I think you're totally right.
Now that I think about it - I've written about Gon and Killua in my fanfics as well, so that probably explains why I think they're flimsy 2-dimensional characters in your fanfic and deserving greater prominence and substance.
And because I also wrote a fanfic starring Kurapika as the main lead for the first two chapters, I'm probably just as vexed that he was used as a friendly plot device and just as callously discarded.
Since it appears I have no way of distinguishing between my fangirl biases as opposed to providing objective critique and reasoning in my reviews, it's probably better for you just to err on the side of caution and treat anything I have said which was remotely critical of your portrayal/inclusion of the canonical HxH cast as just my irrational bias for 'my toys' speaking.
I honestly tried to be objective in my review of your fanfic, but...but...I just couldn't get over the fact that you didn't make any of the canon characters the leading star of your fanfic. And you know all these arguments we've had going back and forth? Yeah, you got that right as well - it was just my prejudice talking all along and given the illusion and glamour of reason.
I give up. You've caught me out on this one. You were doing right by all the characters in your fanfic all this time, and I only wrote that huge-ass review and critique because you weren't giving any of my toys the spotlight I thought they deserved.
What can I say? I'm truly sorry and hope you'll forgive me. The best I can do to repay you is to stop troubling you with this conversation and wish you all the best of luck for you and your writing in the future.
And in the future, when you do find yourself a professional editor, you might also like to go through their trash and stalk them for a month or two, get to know them through and through so that you can likewise attribute their personal bias to any critiques of your work in the future. ![[image]](http://i6.photobucket.com/albums/y229/allsmilies/Comino/klap1.gif)
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Sorry mate - I'm not going to entertain these sorts of childish and irrelevant personal attacks over fanfic reviews and critiques any more.
It's your fanfic - please do as you wish.
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